[Genre] Change.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oQwMSkoykyM

Hey guys,

This is me... rapping. Feel free to CnC my music. I write all of my lyrics. Also, try to take it easy on the rage if you really don't like it. D:


I'm so white. <3
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Sorry but, at some point its like your talking and it doesnt go with the beat and the flow is gone.
The begining was major beast but then it whent and died.

I think it needs a little more feeling. The sound is almost robotic when it comes to the rhythm and flow...throw in some angry tones, some escalated volume o , o

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Originally Posted by Aris

Sorry but, at some point its like your talking and it doesnt go with the beat and the flow is gone.
The begining was major beast but then it whent and died.

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If you knew my voice, you would know that's not even close to talking for me. I'm pretty low pitch. But thanks for the ideas.

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Originally Posted by •Ð ø †

I think it needs a little more feeling. The sound is almost robotic when it comes to the rhythm and flow...throw in some angry tones, some escalated volume o , o

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Thanks for the suggestions. I'll try to be better at that next time. This is another one where it's like you'd have to hear my voice to know.

well, i'm not really into rapp myself, but i am a musician too. what you should do is listen to a lot of rappers, make a list of things you like in their songs and then try to come up with some aemulation (latin word, it means to use it and make it better)
i can see that you will get better, maybe try to do some rapps with more chilling background beat, like many people use Beethoven's Moonlight Sonata, because it's chill and good for first rapps

I don't listen to other musicians when I write.

well, it would help a lot! also: feelings, feelings, feelings, and a bit more of tonal change! it's good for start tho, some famous rappers from my country are a lot shittier!
also get some good ideas on the lyrics, with meaning that would actually touch people

My lyrics don't have meaning?

A lot shittier? So I'm bad then?

well, when i listened to it they didn't give me a part of being in your place, but that's what rapping is about...it has to be put in a way so the audience can feel themself in your skin
even tho i'm not really into rapp, i listened to a lot and still listen to a few, so i can tell you things that will make your songs better

Sometimes you're just off...

I mean... Put some more pitch in it and "feel the beat" :)

It's not bad tho!

keep it up

Very Nice.